|Posted by Jean Kinsey on July 15, 2009 at 2:20 PM|
Writers today need to be accutely aware of the concept of Deep Point of View (POV). This is writing in third person about a character, while describing his or her actions as if in first person, without using "I" or "me". The writer leaves out sensory tags such as hearing, thinking or feeling, replacing them with the actions that signal the action to the reader.
Anger covered Brittany's face as she watched Josh limping down the street hating him.
Brittany slammed the door to her tiny room and shoved things around, yet again; rearranging her possesions so they'd all fit. Josh passed her window, swinging his arms as if people wouldn't notice the limp. She flung the window open, "Move out you big show off!"
By putting the movements into the scene, instead of describng emotions, the scene takes on the showing instead of telling deep POV aspect that so many publishers look for. IT also makes readers feel as if they are participating in the story.